I was putting the little ones to bed then… my father called me and said,” Sybil come here.” I said,” What is it father.” My father said,” The British are burning down
Danbury! Then I said,” Me and Star will go.” My heart was beating really fast. My father said to my mom,” Sybil knows were all of our men live.” Then my mother gave me her cape and swung it around me. I was kind of scared. My mother said,” Be careful.” Then it hit me I felt a knot of fear in my stomach. I swung on Star and my journey began. I thought what might happen on my journey then I saluted my father and took off. It was ten o’clock at night all the houses were pitch black. Than I saw to the east that there was an orange sky I knew right away that it was
Danbury burning. When I reached to the other town the people were already outside and the town bell rang. My throat hurt from calling out my message and my hurt was beating wildly. I would not stop going. I had to do it. But then star had slipped in the mud then he stepped right away. We kept waking up sleeping soldiers. Then we were near Red Mills then star was breathing very heavily. I said,” Star are you ok.” Suddenly I heard hoof beets on the path! I quickly pulled Star to a stop. I jumped into the bushes and pulled star into the bushes to. I held my breath. The hoof beats went away. My hands and knees fell to the ground. When I reached Stormville I heard the alarm go off. When I turned around to go home I was full of mud and tired. I started to fall in my fathers arms, and started to cry.F.I.N If I had never stepped up and round up my fathers men. I would have never bin famous and greeted by George Washington and
Danbury would have burned down and we would probably never had won the Revolutionary War. THE END
12 responses so far ↓
wrinklestudent // April 17, 2007 at 7:15 pm |
awsome story very long with chaulk full of info about sybil
melysa // April 17, 2007 at 7:33 pm |
I`m glad that you choose a woman who who made a big difference in the world!!!
jackie // April 17, 2007 at 7:56 pm |
I liked your use of diolog it needs a little work on details but the rest wasw fine!
austin // April 17, 2007 at 8:03 pm |
I ilke how it was long and filed with details abouat sybil and what she did with star Good Job!!!
Victoria // April 17, 2007 at 8:16 pm |
Nice job!!! You added lots of deatails about Sybil
Julie // April 17, 2007 at 8:17 pm |
Great memoir! I liked the way you said that suddenly Sybil heard hoofbeats on the trail and Sybil went into the bushes and pulled Star in after him. I also liked the way you said “When I turned around to go home I was full of mud and tired. I started to fall in my fathers arms and started to cry.” It was great.
wrinklestudent // April 17, 2007 at 9:09 pm |
nice memoir it included nice info and details!
Rcihie // April 17, 2007 at 9:29 pm |
DearGerard, Wow! It seemes to me that you worked verry hard on your reserch! From Richie
Jessica // April 17, 2007 at 9:49 pm |
I like the way you decribed (I felt a knot near my stomach). Great Gob.
zack p // April 17, 2007 at 11:41 pm |
i thought it was good it had a lot of info and plenty of details from your friend zack p
jeffrey // April 17, 2007 at 11:45 pm |
I liked how you aded vocie
to it
kevin B. // April 18, 2007 at 12:22 am |
verry good job gerard great detail and with the heart beating like crazy great!!!!!!!!