I pulled the knob to cast in. “I got something!” I yelled in a happy voice. Everybody was very happy when I told them that I had something “get the net!” I yelled the mates came running over with the net ready to catch the fish. My pole was bending so much. It jumped out of the water. “It’s a gigantic porgy.” Its tail was as big as 1 of my fingers. The body was almost too big to hold but the eyes were very small and slippery. I tried to pull it up but it was just too heavy. The mates came running over and helped me pull it with the net. They must be having a hard time pulling it up I thought in my mind. I thought that I would remember this fish for the rest of my life. I still remember reeling it in and trying to pull it up onto the boat.
13 responses so far ↓
chris // January 24, 2007 at 9:59 pm |
I like the way you compared the fish’s tail to your finger
zach p // January 24, 2007 at 11:42 pm |
i liked the way you compared the fishs tals to your
nail it was very detailed
Julie // January 25, 2007 at 11:06 pm |
Nice lead. It “hooked” me in.
Richie // January 26, 2007 at 12:03 am |
Dear Connor,
You addes plenty of detail, and some discrive words…
From Richie.
zach m // January 26, 2007 at 12:16 am |
I was there, it was big !!! You had a good beggining you hook people in and use great details.
Tyler // January 26, 2007 at 5:12 pm |
nice it hooked me in i remember when you came home with like 200 dollars.
chris // January 26, 2007 at 5:13 pm |
nice story i like the detail in it
Kaden // January 26, 2007 at 5:16 pm |
Cool,
it really makes me feel like I am trying to reel in a fish.
Robbie // January 26, 2007 at 5:17 pm |
dude that was a sick story it was cool when you said that fish was to heavey to lift for the mates
from robbie
Shannon // January 29, 2007 at 9:13 pm |
Great lead! It really got me into reading it more!
Great discription.
nick // January 30, 2007 at 1:13 am |
Hey Connor,
Were you at my b day party…
i liked your story a lot because it seems like your realing in a big porgy know why because that fish was on my line first before..
and you used a lot of detail
From,
nick
kevin B. // January 30, 2007 at 12:27 pm |
Connor that was a great story and great lead. Good dialogue! Keep up the good work.
victoria // February 18, 2007 at 11:04 pm |
Connor,
I liked the begging of your story!! I also liked in your story how you added the fish eyes were small and very slippery!! Nice work!! I mean life story lol!!