Wittle Gym
“Zack it’s your turn.” “I know.” I got up on the ropes and I heard everyone yelling. I grabbed one rope and put my hand on the next rope then I heard this kid scream. “Ahh,” I said, and I splatted to the ground. “Ow,” I said and I limped to the teacher. I went to the water fountain then I got my drink. I went back inside to wait online. “Zack it’s your turn.” “Man,” I said. It’s just like before. I got on the mat and jumped on the rope. I was talking to myself and I said I am not going to fall. I jumped to the next. I felt my hand’s rope burn. “Ow.” And I jumped to the next one more rope. I pushed my legs to the next rope and jumped “woo,” I said. I went down. I made it across the ropes I went into the locker room, came out, and went back to class.
13 responses so far ↓
Stephanie // January 21, 2007 at 4:54 am |
Is every student in your class going to be in the categories section? I would like to read other stories by the other kids in your class
jessica // January 24, 2007 at 9:36 pm |
I like it because it made me exsited when I heard it and I saw it was incraedable.
jessica // January 24, 2007 at 9:37 pm |
I like it because it made me exsited when I heard it and I saw it was unsean.
Nick. A // January 24, 2007 at 9:38 pm |
Hey Zach I like the way you write your storie by telling your storie so specific.
jeffrey // January 24, 2007 at 10:01 pm |
good at explaning and talking about what you did but you should add more details
zach m // January 25, 2007 at 1:39 am |
you used great diolog and I also did that in kindergarden and you were there so you probably saw me.
Your friend,
Zach.m
chris // January 25, 2007 at 11:54 pm |
i like
chris // January 26, 2007 at 12:11 am |
Good job!!! It was funny how you said “…I splated on the ground. It was a good way to describe the way you were hirt by saying “…I limped to the teacher.”
chris // January 29, 2007 at 9:02 pm |
I like the way you start with diloge
Connor McAlary // January 29, 2007 at 10:02 pm |
nice story Zach i liked your diolouge heres an example (“zach it’s you turn”)
aj // January 29, 2007 at 10:58 pm |
I like It when you said that you wont fall
Richie // January 30, 2007 at 12:10 am |
I liked how you used dioglouge and how you showed it, not told it.
Awesomely awesome!
jeffrey // April 13, 2007 at 12:09 am |
at the end you didn’t have to say i went to the locker room got changed and when back to class